Life
Throughout my life I never noticed how people were told to walk past me carrying a basket of flowers or ride their bike past my home or come up to me and ask a question at a specific time. I never considered for a second that my whole life since birth was a fake. The big man running the show never suspected that I would ever find out about the real reality, but here I stand tall and free. I quickly responded to his plea for me to stay with my common goodbye, "In case I don’t see you, good afternoon, good evening, and good night." Finally I stand on the streets a free man, allowed to make his own choices, allowed to love whoever I may choose. Now I realize how far I have come and the large weight of lies has finally been lifted off my shoulders.
Jenna,
ReplyDeleteI like this piece. It is short, simple, and makes the reader better understand the end of the movie. You use imagery, which adds a nice touch, and the only thing I would say would be that it is a little heavy on the summary side, but nice job.
I really like this piece. I can see the relation between it and the move. I actually think that this piece would be better in a poem format. It really seemed to flow. It's wouldn't necessarily have to be closed form since it kind of has a pulse but a poem would sound really cool with this piece. I really like how you took the movie and kind of put it in a real life perspective too. Nice job.
ReplyDeleteI liked this piece a lot. The approach you took to it worked really well and it sounded a lot like what Truman might have been thinking. Really nice job, I would just suggest that you put a author's note in next time because I was a little confused until I read more of the piece. Nice job!
ReplyDeleteI liked how you had it in his perspective it was interesting, and had what he would have said in it well. I liked how it all went together and had almost a closing at the end. Good job
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